PoetryConnection.net Discussion

[joseph]

Hello, All. I'm new here and I'm looking forward to this exchange. May it be a positive one for everyone!

Lately I've been experimenting with with some Japanese poetry styles.
Tanka, Sedoka and Dodoitsu are similar to Haiku but with a different syllable structure. What are your thoughts on the quality of the following (inspired by watching my children growing)? Each of the following is a separate poem.

1.
Ever growing boy.
Trying out the different
aspects of manhood
in his play as he
tries to understand his world. (Tanka)

2.
As we watch you grow
we yearn to keep you captive
in innocent years of youth.
Helplessly we watch
the fleeting years of childhood
passing into memory. (Sedoka)

3.
So short were the days that we
knew you as children. Brief as
a summer afternoon that
passes into dusk. (Dodoitsu)

Finally, plain ol' Haiku about my 5 year old learning to ride without training wheels:

With new found freedom
she pedals out of my life
and into her future.

I'm looking forward to participating regularly!

[bigdk20]

I've never seen anything other than the Hiku anf it is need to see other forms of poetry. I particularly liked the Dodoitsu .

bigdk20

[Harrison]

I made this so you may all understand differnt forms of poetry and dabble in them yoursleves I hope you enjoy them.

The Dodoitsu is a fixed folk song form of Japanese origin and is often about love or humor. It has 26 syllables made of of four lines of 7, 7, 7, 5 syllables respectively. It is unrhymed and non-metrical.

Sedoka is a very old form of "waka"(Japanese poetry). Originally, It has 6 lines, totaling in 38 syllables in the following from: 5,7,7,5,7,7. The poem is broken into two parts of 5/7/7 stanzas referred to as the katauta. The one below has 2 twists, one after second line, the second after the 4th line. Sedoka has often been the venue to create folk ballads. For more information follow link to Sedoka

Sijo is Korean Poetry. Sijo is written in 44-46 syllables on either three or six lines. There should be a shift in content between the second and third lines. Unlike haiku, various poetic devices, such as metaphors and similes are accepted. Sijo is not normally titled. The first group of classical sijo is shown in six lines, the second in three lines. Either is appropriate.


I put this little guide together, I couldnt come up with anything on the Tanka, I liked it though, I put in the Sijo because its one of my favorite styles, Thanks!